Congratulations on that many approaches, man.
Also, nice work recording that and having the confidence to put it up here for critique.
So, here's my constructive criticism, because you asked for it.
Your tone/speech patterns could use a shot of testosterone.
Look up some movies with leading actors that are looked at as manly, and practice adopting their tone and speech patterns.
Just like a woman's voice/speech pattern can seduce a man, a man's voice/speech pattern can do the same to a woman, and your tone in that conversation was far from the tone/speech pattern required to achieve that effect.
Again, I'm saying this in a completely positive way, I'm not ribbing you, I think it's fantastic that you're putting in effort and working on your game. My suggestion would be to work on your tone/speech pattern, and emulating some screen icons would be an easy way to get started.
Good luck, man, and again, congratulations on putting in all that work so far!
Also, nice work recording that and having the confidence to put it up here for critique.
So, here's my constructive criticism, because you asked for it.
Your tone/speech patterns could use a shot of testosterone.
Look up some movies with leading actors that are looked at as manly, and practice adopting their tone and speech patterns.
Just like a woman's voice/speech pattern can seduce a man, a man's voice/speech pattern can do the same to a woman, and your tone in that conversation was far from the tone/speech pattern required to achieve that effect.
Again, I'm saying this in a completely positive way, I'm not ribbing you, I think it's fantastic that you're putting in effort and working on your game. My suggestion would be to work on your tone/speech pattern, and emulating some screen icons would be an easy way to get started.
Good luck, man, and again, congratulations on putting in all that work so far!