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Lessons in Storytelling
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Lessons in Storytelling

This post on Return of Kings reminded me of a girl I went out with a few years ago. She wrote me a very detailed email in response to an online opener. The way she wrote it, and the way she alluded to various things we'd do and how she carried me through the whole trip made me want to go out with her regardless of her looks (she was still cute though).

I messaged her with something about where you would take me on a trip and what we would do. That was my opening and her response was very impressive on two fronts. First, the effort she put in was remarkable given it was an online interaction. Second, look at the details and the way she puts you in the environment and gives you a feel of what is going on.

I forgot where, but I learned about the story telling technique and incorporate it a lot into my dates. That ROK article is dead on and most girls eat it up when you can relate a story that well.

Anyway, here's that girl's response to the opening I mention above. To put it in context, I mentioned she looked like she was drinking and I was stuck at work so she would have to plan the trip, my profile says I travel a lot, and so on:

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First off, I'm not buzzed, because I know the trick of drinking a Gatorade to subside the alcohol.

Next, my bags are already packed, and so were yours. I was going to kidnap you and take you out of town before your work got canceled because I have amazing vision (my father is an ophthalmologist) and I can drive us anywhere. And fast, nonetheless, because I’ve seen the autobahn and the actual BMW and Mercedes plants in Germany where the cars are manufactured, so I have experience racing. I also planned to drive so you could do the work in the car if you did have to work, and if you get carsick, I brought medicine to fix that. (However, I respect you working long hours because my career will make me do the same. So if you completely object, I would just bring you dinner for the long nights of which you’d be working).

But since I found out that you ruined the spontaneous plans, instead of getting mad, I'm thrilled. This means I can cancel our four-day trip to Vegas, and do something different. I picked Vegas initially because I knew it may be tough to pull you away from work, and only Vegas, bikinis, hot dresses and gambling would be the bait to lure you away from your office.

So, instead, I let you have some Vegas adventure, and we drive to Vegas just Thursday night. We gamble, I wear my hot dress that makes you happy I'm your girlfriend and not someone else's, I cross my fingers so you win big, then we go back to the hotel and have.... well that will have to wait for the actual thing because words wont be able to describe… and I’m classy in emails.

Then in the morning, we're off, because now I get to pick somewhere where we both will have an amazing time...the Southwest special flight to Colorado. Here your great vision can indulge the picturesque Rocky Mountains, because you probably haven't been because you're from the Big Apple, and the only tall picturesque monuments are the spectacular Skyscrapers.

Of course I will let you sit next to the window because you've never had the experience of flying over the 14 footers and I want you to see them. Once we arrive, I will have already arranged for a limo to pick us up and drive us to Vail, which is only two hours away, thus allowing us a long stay in Colorado.

Since you're so adventurous, we will walk around Vail Village and see the authentic stores, but not go inside because we hate shopping. We will probably meet foreigners because so many come to work there, so it'll be like you're in one of the countries of which you've visited.

Then we will take the chair lift up the top of the mountain (this time of year the snow is melted and we can see the Spring blooming flowers and have a better view of the mountains). As we're going up, I'm holding your hand because I'm scared and you’re telling me we're going to be ok (or visa versa, but because I like you, I let you think I'm the one that's afraid... and we never tell your friends you were).

Once we are at the top, we have a fabulous lunch, wine and we take pictures of us at the Many Mile High mark. We may have some fun of our own before we go down, though.

Once we come down, we find a fun bike path to bike around. We don’t do too many hills because we’re stuffed from lunch. But we both could because my pictures are accurate and I’m in good shape. Or if you don't like biking, we take a hike around. We could even do the Alpine Slide if you want. After, we go back and get ready for dinner. You've picked out my outfit before we left so its whatever you've chosen. After dinner, we go back to the Jacuzzi at our hotel. The rest of the night is like the previous, amazing but the description must wait until the actual night.

The next day we decide to take that limo to Golden, where we get a tour of the Coors Brewery. This was accomplished only because I had connections, because they no longer do any tours. After visiting Golden, and sampling the top brews, we go to Denver, where we get to watch the Lakers defeat the Nuggets. We stay at the Four Seasons because I have connections again, so we save money because we both work hard.

Then we wake up early Sunday morning, have brunch, and if you're allergic to anything, I make sure brunch doesn't have it in the ingredients. Then we pack our bags and head back to ***. We have dinner at *** before going back to the apartment. You wake up for work on Monday with a smile and having experienced commercialized fun and natural fun. When you get to work, you open your briefcase and there’s something I’ve left inside to get you excited to come home early……the newest season of Law and Order. Then you lift it up with pure joy and find something else, that may create a distraction from Law and Order. A travel guide for our next trip. Then you lift that up and there’s something soft and somewhat…. inappropriate for work. So you come home early to get it out of your office and I show you how it’s used. Then you tell me I'm the best girlfriend ever. The end. [Image: smile.gif]


Notice how she plays to a man's ideal woman (sex, bringing dinner, staying fit). If a female's ability to captivate a man's imagination, sounded in logic, works (as it did here)...think of the flip side. Girls are seated on emotion and if you can take them on a journey with your words then you are ahead of the curve. Work on your storytelling boys, it's quite effective.
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#2

Lessons in Storytelling

Game = telling a good story

Q: What is the most important muscle in pick up???

A: Your tongue!
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#3

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What an amazing response. I would have been won over.
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We gamble, I wear my hot dress that makes you happy I'm your girlfriend and not someone else's

That line got me. I also liked the element of surprise with the briefcase in the end. Story telling is one aspect I need to improve. Telling a good story off the cuff is hard, I need to sit down and write one out. I hang out with some great story tellers does 3 things (which I'm sure the article alludes to): 1) provides conversational hooks; 2) builds comfort and connection; 3) expressing yourself intelligently is a dhv
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That was probably the best email a girl has ever written to win a guy over! I'd be gaga for a girl like that! I also need to improve my story telling. One of THE best skills to have! Thanks for sharing it slubu!
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Story game.

Good article on story telling to enhance your story game.

22 rules of storytelling by Pixar:
http://io9.com/5916970/the-22-rules-of-s...g-to-pixar
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Great, seductive, mouth-watering description from the girl.

The question is, would she drop you like a hot potato if you mentioned that you like her instead of playing hot-cold and negging?

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Storytelling is magic.

Everyone loves a good story, hamsters most of all.

Weave them well, and she'll go with you to every exotic fantasy, even if you never leave your shitty apartment.

Sloots gon' sloot.
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Totally forgot about this girl, going to contact her she moved to NYC and I'm going to be there next week.

Edit: That was quick, immediate response. Sadly moved to SF..
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The physiological power she uses in her story is impressive.

I think it's best you don't ever meet her. This women sounds like a player herself.
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great story and great thread. wow.

reminds me of this overused but true quote:

“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.” -Albert Einstein

krauser's facebook chats used a lot of storytelling.

i need to work on my imagination and storytelling.
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this also reminds me of something i tweeted today:

Beginner says: So, where are you from?
Expert says: You look Serbian. It’s the black hair, long legs, and crazy eyes. (credit: @Krauserpua)

when you first meet a girl, the difference between a boring interview question "so, where are you from?", and an amusing, interesting, push pull, alpha statement -- that could be the difference between the girl opening and not opening.

and the alpha statement is amusing and interesting because it is imaginative and spontaneous -- or at least, it feels that way to her. she feels like, hey, this isn't just another boring, horny dude. this man is different.

imagination. creativity. spontaneity.

a girl is looking for a man to make her feeling stuff. and the more you make her feel, the more she will want you in her life.
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I've just posted the clip below with Theo Von's hilarious cab story (@21:49) on another thread:






I've been getting more and more into stand up for the past two or three years, specifically listening to great story tellers like Joey Diaz. Man, the things you can learn listening to these guys.

My #1 recommendation for anyone that wants to improve their storytelling: spend a couple of hours listening to This Is Not Happening.

It's a Comedy Central show that features comics telling 5-15min stories. Some are hilarious, some not so much. Pay attention to the energy, the hand gestures, the structure (sometimes non-linear) of stories.

Watch the clip below. Diaz's story has funny moments but overall it's not a comedic story. Still - his deliver is magnetic. He takes you for a ride from hilarious to deep - pay attention to his emotion and the dead silence of the crowd at 06:40 - to hilarious again (07:10).






For shorter stories, this guy Paulytoon has been animating a lot of cool ones from multiple podcasts:






Another recommendation is listening to podcasts with comics, when they can go longer for their stories and you can see how they fit in a more social setting, with interruptions, detours, questions.

There's a bunch of cool podcasts here, like:

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- The fighter and the kid - Brendan Schaub and Bryan Callen
- Monday Morning Podcast - Bill Burr
- The church of what's happening now - Joey Diaz
- WTF - Marc Maron
- Ari Shaffir's Skeptic Tank - Ari Shaffir

This shit story had me in tears - starts at 01:20:




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Thats magical, what a gal.

I'd be all over that.

Sadly, so rare to see that kind of effort.
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those are some great stories, no doubt, but not really lessons.

anyone willing to drop a data sheet on this stuff?

I previously read some old Ross Jefferies stuff. I never subscribed to his stuff, but he makes a lot of good points about telling stories, having emotional spikes, etc.
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